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is my thesis clear if not please help me make one?
The more I walk through my neighborhood, the more I realize my streets are real terrible. From missing spend signs to potholes in almost every corner; my streets seem to worsen almost every day. I have been living in this neighborhood for about 11 years, and for those 11 years not in one occasion has the city tried to fix the streets. My neighborhood has witnessed various car accidents, residential damages, mildly injuries for pedestrians and in rare occasions a lost loving pet. The city can contribute to a safer neighborhood by maintaining the streets. This includes having caution signs throughout the entire neighborhood to insure the safety of its residence and other ongoing commuters. Proposing to redo the whole neighborhood would be a lifelong process, but impossible it sure isn’t. Yet by making simple tasks and taking them in affect it will benefit everyone throughout the entire community.
Public Comments
- The city can contribute to a safer neighbourhood by better maintaining the streets and improving signage; although redoing the entire area will take a long time, its benefits far outweigh its difficulties.
- Well, I'm not going to give you a new thesis, but I will give you some suggestions. First off, your grammar is terrible. Check your work over and over, does it sound correct to you? Instead of saying, "The more I walk through my neighborhood, the more I realize my streets are real terrible." Say something like, "Over the past 11 years, I have come to the realization that my neighborhood is deteriorating at an alarming rate." Then you can continue, but again, please check your grammar, I am an English teacher and you wouldn't get much for that opening from me, sorry. I can't point out all the mistakes, but does "My neighborhood has witnessed various car accidents, residential damages, mildly injuries for pedestrian and in rare occasions a lost loving pet" sound right to you? It should read: My neighborhood has witnessed various car accidents, damage to homes, mild injuries to pedestrians and on rare occasions, loss of a loving pet. Good luck.
